OW!
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Oooh my GAAAaAWwd!
*drip*
Why would anyone do that?
F^A^
gay
I am bringing all of my power down on you and a knife
glory to my ass
FUCK YE
I'm gonna actual critique this, i figured if your somewhat self aware youll be able to understand where im coming from, but nevertheless lets get on with it.
1st of all, megaman sound effects get fucking annoying after a while, i dont know how someone can sit through hours of BLIP BLOP BLIP without getting pissed off, but whatever, thats what you like so you put it in there, fine. Except you spent 98 fucking dollars on those sound effects and they're shit. Also, the folly sound effect of the clothes rustling is so fucking loud.
The music iust ok i guess, i dunno, not realy my kinda thing, pretty basic shit.
2ndly, and this is a big one, YO NEED TO BE ABLE TO EFFICIENTLY TELL YOUR STORY!
The art of animation, comic books, ect. is to tell stories through a visual medium. Truthfully, you dont NEED words and dialogue or text to tell your story at all, if the poses, characters, composition, lighting, ect. is god, then you can get away with it. You however have failed at grasping this concept.
All of the scenes in this short make no sense, i literally cant follow it/have no fuicking idea what happened from beginning to end. If you asked me what the plot of this episode was, id say some orange guy fucked around with 2 grey guys, then became friends, and while hanging out the one guy got shot. but like, im not even realy sure. I have no idea what the difference between the characters were, i lost track of who was who, i didn't know if orange guy was a dick or what, he just went around slapping his knee and pelvis thrusting.
The backgrounds are pretty garbage too, they're overly simplified and are hard to follow, i have no idea where the characters are in relation to each other, and if im looking at a new scene or an extension of the last one.
finally, the fucking animation. To be honest, there were some passable frame by frame sequences in here, i gotta say.
but tweening around geometric shapes is fuckin' lazy, unappealing, and once again creates a lot of confusion for the audience.
And i guess that's what i have to say about this whole cartoon in general, its CONFUSING. I was in a call with you and you explained everything abou color theory to me, IT DOESN'T MAKE SENSE! I could barely fucking follow the incoherent lore of this backwards ass fantasy sci fi shit storm you call a narrative! you are the only person who understands your story, literally no one else can follow it. Show this to anyone, and ask them to tell you what happened, i highly doubt they can tell you an accurate plot synopsis.
but what do i know, im just another fag who gets whipped around by influence bosses.
I will be sure to note that next time =^)
you did a real solid job with this, like, every aspect is pretty solid, but next time fix some things up. Like, work in 1920 X 1080, get better voice actors, and better sound design. but besides that you have super strong drawing/animation skills.
keep it up.
Oi thanks for the advice man! I definitely want to work in 1920 x 1080 next time. I have always been fond of amateur voice acting and I realize that's not ideal, but I will consider getting more people for voices.
this shits fuckin nuts, honestly man i got nothin to even say, this is just fuckin perfect.
i joke about a lot of shit and rate things that are dfumb and stuff, but this is genuinely the best collab ive ever been a part of. i hope everyone enjoys this shit as much as i do.
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Joined on 11/9/14